Deathchorde (finished)

[deathchorde]

Rex; Maximus; Human

Name: Maximus Rex

Nickname: Deathchorde

Age: 18

Gender: Male

Race: Meister

Position: Student

Class: One Star

Partner: (pending)

A Strong Body

Picture:



Appearance: Deathchorde stands at a height of 6'3, very toned muscle build with a semi-slender figure, light brown eyes, and short length black hair which he keeps shagged out into thin spikes. Around his eyes are tattoos which are made to look like sharp eye liner, and the corners of his mouth are also tattooed with small black slits. His piercings are wild an unorthodox ranging from eye brow piercings, lip rings, four tongue studs in a row, multiple ear piercings, and large safety pins in his neck. He also has tattoos around his torso being a large black snake wrapping his body, and a giant red skull over his chest covered in barbed wire, and a sword through the skull. Very much a walking freak show to most. He obtained his tattoos illegally at a younger age by one of his old gang buddies.

His style of dress in always metal-head rock and roll theme, ranging from torn jeans with a vulgar gothic t-shirt, to black t-shits, leather jeans, and black steel toed boots. Although he tends to wear boots regardless of what outfit he has on. His accessories always include his favorite studded leather wrist guards, chains hanging from his waist, and a barbed wire necklace with a skull resting between his collar bone. When most see him, he always has a wicked teeth disclosing grin plastered onto his face but the one notable feature is that he always has an insane wide eyed glare to match his smile. It would seem like he were up to something even when he's not, and its not hard to tell when hes angry due to the fact that his smile slants down slightly and gives a very blatant frown with his eyebrows.

He hold a lazy posture and is a big fan of letting his arms dangle with his thumbs hooked into his pockets. His walk is always care free and he holds himself like hes the most important an well known person on the planet just by the way he moves. When playing guitar, his body language gives off the impression that playing is all that he knows, as if he were playing for an entire concert and the world is watching.


Height: 6'3

Weight: 180lbs.

Fighting Style: He has a very particular style from long range with his shouts to short range combat. He loves to keep moving not staying in one spot for too long. He tends to stay loose to maximize his full agility and periodically closes in to execute fatal blows the moment he sees an opening. He is very skilled in axe handling due to messing around with an axe he found as a kid, utilizing both the blade for brutal chops or blunt smashing, and the hilt as well flat side of the blade to block incoming attacks. Deathchorde is very analytical in means of studying his opponents to spot openings or recognizing when he is in extreme danger, a survival skill he learned growing up on the dangerous streets of the Bronx. His favorite thing to do is calculate how many moves it would take to end a fight and end it as quick as possible. He loves to bait opponents into making moves that play against them, and often sets up traps and pincers his opponents by surprise.

Personality: Deathchorde is an odd on by far, if his expressions don't paint that well enough, his speech will throw a person off by far. He gives others the distinct idea that he is bat-shit-insane, either by muttering to himself, giving off random giggles from personal thoughts, or asking theoretical questions that seem odd. But regardless he is actually HIGHLY intelligent on an MIT level but in regards to math and physics. In a lot of cases those who don't know him well would never know this bit about him because he is bored and tends to drift off into his own thoughts if the matter at hand doesn't interest him...and not a lot of things do.

Regardless he is very reliable and a good friend to everyone around him. He does have a bit of a violent temperament and loves to debate. One way to get him talking is to talk about music which is his one existing passion. Specifically he love metal music but is an expert on all music subjects. He LOVES to play electric guitar and it stands as his favorite musical instrument over anything else. Most find it shocking but when he isn't playing guitar he loves reading quantum physics books. He makes it a point to be on time for anything and always keeps his word, lying isn't big on his personal beliefs but most can't tell that hes telling the truth from the way he acts.

He loves animals and children, and hates fighting people who are weak or cannot defend themselves. But once he has started a fight he always intends on ending it, because of his darkened love for fighting he would likely end up killing his opponent from losing himself in the moment and he is not by any means above killing a person. Although it may not seem like it because of his dark characteristics, he has a bitter distaste for evil but holds a very fine line between acts of sheer violence and evil intent. He also hates being told what to do by male figures, a psychological issue with his father leaving him as a child. He would much rather be asked than told.

Inside the Soul


Abilities:

Soul Purge: Sonic Spirit Amp

Rather than power his spirit into muscles for raw strength, Deathchorde uses a form of self-resonance to transform his body into a spiritual sound amp, by channeling his energy into both his lungs and vocal cords he can release that energy as sonic notes. This allows him to draw deeper breaths and release the spiritual force as a concussive sonic shout that flows out as a bright orange ball of energy/sound combined together. The spiritual sound wave does not travel through physical matter just like normal sound does, but uses sonic vibrations to rattle and loosen things apart from the inside while the raw spiritual energy portion blasts it apart. The range of his blasts can extend to 10ft and runs out of breath fast mostly because hes a smoker, mostly the range of how far he can shout. The harder he shouts the bigger the blast, but the potency of the blasts dilute the farther it travels just like sound can fade in distance. Usually he can release around 10 blasts, but the more he uses it the closer he draws to temporarily losing his voice from shouting too much.

Resonances: (Pending)

Out of your Mind

Strengths: Quick thinker, Agile, and Analytical

Weaknesses:

Easily enraged - loses his strategy.

Not physically strong - hits may do less damage but using his strategy and attacking weak points he is very effective.

Low stamina - He tires quickly due to smoking.


Hobbies: Play guitar, read physics books, play chess, or sleep.

Likes: Metal music, music in general, intelligent debates, cats, children, sleeping, fighting, science, math, hot showers, girls, hot tubs, hot springs, summer, spicy food, smoking cigarettes, pain, piercings, tattoos, art, and music videos.

Dislikes: Fighting defenseless people, being woken up, the sound of clipping nails in a silent room, people that don't pre-warn before farting, cold weather, dumb people, bland food, when people talk ill of his music talent(REALLY pisses him off), people that don't know what they're talking about but act like they do, country music, ignorance, inconsiderate people, video games, spiders, drugs, and old dolls(just creepy).

Aspirations: To be a world known rock star or MAYBE an engineer.

History: Max Rex, known to most as Deathchorde after joining Shibusen, grew up in Bronx, New York with his single-parent mother, Natasha. He had no other siblings and his father ran out on him when he was six. Wanting the best for her child, Max's mother started him early on school subjects but he excelled most at math and science. He always got good grades and was taking advanced courses by the age of ten. Around age fourteen he was a bit of a problem child due to his father issues, getting into fights and getting caught up with a gang that occupied his street. Although he was a brilliant kid, Max hid his intelligence feeling the need to look cool to his new friends. In and out of juvenile detention, Max would spend his time committing petty theft, honing his skills as a fighter against other gangs, running from the police, and getting tattoos to mark his achievements.

Around the age of sixteen he finally slowed down his reckless behavior when he met a washed up musician that lived in his building, a man named Stoney, who peaked Max's attention with music. He would visit Stoney every day, learning about all kinds of music, musical history, Stoney's life as a roadie, and even learning how to play the guitar when he wasn't running around with his gang. Every day he would find some excuse to catch up to his gang buddies later in order to hang out with Stoney in secret from other who might think he had gone soft.

Playing guitar seemed to take his interest more and more each day, until it seemed like it was all he liked to do, getting in trouble with his friends less each day. Shortly after his 17th birthday, his neighbor Stoney had died from a drug overdose and for the first time in Max's life he wanted to change and make something of himself. He would often recall Stoney's comments that the world had no place for uneducated people and that fueled Max's ambition for making a new life for himself. Max would often take trips to the local library and read books, getting back in touch with his intelligent side and knack for math and science. Though it wasn't something he wished to share with any of his friends, he had quit the gang without telling anyone in order to resume his studies in hopes of going to collage. It was only a matter of a few months before his mind moved onto more advanced studies such as astrophysics and pi, his brain seemed to grasp the basic concepts so it was easy for him to pick it up in depth after a while.

He attempted to make a change for himself by paying more attention in school in hopes to get an early collage recommendation, but his reputation as a problem child only lead to teachers accusing him of cheating when he turned in A-grade papers and tests. Furious as the accusations, he dropped out of school having too much pride to deal with accusations and found himself hanging around an old construction site every day after that where he would practice playing guitar in solitude. In his mind at the time it would have been easier to start a band than get others who had known him his whole life to believe he was actually smart. He discovered his ability as a Meister when practicing his singing tones, his voice breaking uncontrollably into a sonic explosion that blew a massive hole in a section of a torn down building.

His energy must have been detected by another Meister, because shortly after, he was contacted at his house and recruited into Shibusen. Figuring that there was nothing left for him in New York, he accepted the invitation and joined the school where he was taught how to control his spiritual energy. He changed his name to Deathchorde and dedicated himself to the school where he could exercise his intelligence without being judged on his character. So far at age 18, he has learned a great deal of control over his ability, but it did take him a while to soak in the supernatural existence and purpose of the school. But from the things that he was shown he soon became a believer and hopes to become a powerful meister before showing the world that he can rock...a silent last tribute to his old friend Stoney.

Extra Notes: Deathchorde is a smoker and for that reason he has a shorter lung capacity than he potential could have. Most of the teachers have brought to his attention that the duration and spiritual potency of his lungs when shouting could greatly increase if he quit smoking. Unfortunately he is too addicted to kick his habit at the moment.

PW: sloppy & makeouts

Behind the strings

Alias: Jay

Other characters: None

Face Claim: N/A

RP Sample:

Deathchorde sat sound asleep in class, a light snore rattling out from the space between his arms which were wrapping around his downward pointed head. Deep between the space in his arms, his mouth seemed to work overtime to create a fair amount of drool upon his desk. The sounds of his teacher's lecture seemed to fade into a blur as he dreamed of performing the greatest rock concert in history. Suddenly he was greeted with a flying book to his head. Now the typical response would be to sit up, deal with the embarrassment, and pay attention to class. No, that was far too...not Deathchorde. In his partially sleep state the boy immediately sat up, threw up the devil horns with his right hand, and shouted, "GOODNIGHT BROOKLYN!!!", all the while subconsciously releasing his soul purge shout as a massive ball of energy and sound that flew up and blew a hole right into the ceiling.

Right at the end of that energy release he woke up completely, just in time to see his entire class ducking for cover while tiny bits of ceiling particles fell to the floor. His teacher seemed to ignore the fact that the massive hole sat above the class, more so just grateful that the force blew the structure up so fine that nothing fell and harmed the students. He pushed his glasses up and spoke with a angry frown and a grin, "Im glad that you could join us, Deathchorde, maybe you could answer the math equation on the board since you were paying attention so well? Hmm?", hoping to put the boy on the spot and embarrass him for falling asleep.

In his sleepy haze, Deathchorde squinted slightly to see the board from the back of the room and read an impossibly long math equation. He gave off a tired yawn and gave the answer in an exhausted tone, "4,882,675.3",.....then fell back asleep slamming his forehead against the surface of the desk on the way down. This time his snore was MUCH louder. The teacher's fists clenched tight with a red angered face to match, "When he wakes up, tell Mr.Rex that he has earned detention...again.". That most likely would involve staying after and patching up that hole. Served him right for staying up so late listening to Megadeth albums.

[Rylux]

Alright just a few things need some tweaking.
Appearance:
With the weight you have for his height he would be considered large. This contradicts him having a semi-slender appearance. We use www.healthchecksystems.com/heightweightchart.htm this chart so just lower his weight a bit to around 180.

About the tattoos how did he get them? With how many he has it seems like this has been going on for a while and the average age to get a tattoo without an adult is 18. Just some elaboration on this in his history like say he got them from a friend unofficially or his parents let him or what not.

Fighting Style:
Can you explain how his style is unorthodox yet analytical? These traits seem to work against each other. You also say his fighting is rash which doesn’t seem to work with analytical.

You say he loves to flip around but being in the larger weight class this would be difficult. Also you make no mention of training to do this in his history. One does not suddenly manage to land flips well let alone in combat.

He would not be an expert at anything at his age plus you make no mention of him learning to fight with axes.

Personality:

Just a small thing here. As you don’t mention ages in his history I assume he started paying attention in school recently so around 16+? If so I find it hard to imagine him being terribly smart and reading quantum physics. He can still be smart but take into account his history, he shouldn’t be a genius.

Inside the soul:

For appearance sake just delete the weapon sections as they don’t relate to the character.

Abilities:

I like his ability! But it does need a little reworking. Stick to just the vocal blast for starters, that makes it like a soul purge just through the air. Little thing but please change the color of the blast, it can be anything but red or purple as those colors correspond to kishin and witches respectively. And removing the guitar part the only other thing is that it cannot pass through physical matter. As a soul technique it will behave as such so physical objects can stop it but also be broken by it. Just like a ranged soul purge. Also include limits like how far it can reach and how many times he can use it before becoming exhausted.

Strengths:

The first two work but him being analytical seems to contradict his rashness.

Weaknesses:

All of these are disadvantages, with the exception of easily enraged. Easily enraged is iffy but connected to his rash nature it would cause him to act without thinking or planning. Anger him and he would forget strategies and the like. So you can keep easily angered if it acts as such and add two more weaknesses. Remember they must show up in every battle not situational things.

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History:

I would like some ages and some expansion but overall it looks good.

Extra:

On the note of the color of his soul shout I suggest orange. You seem to be using that as his text color and most people use the color of their soul for that.
I suggest toning down his intelligence to a normal level for someone his age. Seeing as how he tended to neglect it previously being on par with others currently would make him smart.

I also suggest toning up his rashness. You make it sound like the character is rash with an underlying intelligence but then focus on his smarts but neglect the rash.

For strength maybe add something physical? Like is he fast or strong? Does he have good balance or good flexibility? Things like that.

As for weaknesses you have his rash behavior so maybe something like lacks physical strength or speed? Clumsy or limited flexibility?

One other thing is his name. You say he goes by Deathchord now so is that just his nickname or did he change his name to that upon entering Shibusen? Just add that into his history if the later.

Also you are missing the passwords that can be found in the rules and character rules.

Most people have issues balancing strengths and weaknesses and the other things are mainly specific adjustments. I do like the character and with a bit of tweaking he should be ready to start!

[deathchorde]

Changes made, more detail added, and profile history extended to fit the entire personality of insane, smart, and thuggish.

[Rylux]

Better just a few more things need to be adjusted.

First you are missing the password in the character rules section.

Fighting Style:

Just to clarify some things you say his style is long and close range but it sounds like it is only close range. Also that jump and flip thing seems out of place. His style seems to involve being agile and getting close to attack. Just remove the long range part and the jump flip part and it should be good. If you want to keep the flipping part explain it more, like how good is he at it? How did he learn it? Things like that. I personally feel he would be fine without it.

Abilities:

Just tone down his ability to about a 10 foot range and 10 blasts. It may seem small but you can always upgrade these limits with points as he grows stronger and he may even rely on the shouts after finding a weapon.

Strengths/Weaknesses:

Alright this is the main issue here.
Quick thinker, Agile, Analytical, Speed, Strength
Easily enraged

These are his strengths and weaknesses respectively, as you can see they do not exactly balance. My suggestion is to remove the speed and strength part of his strengths so it only reads Quick thinker, Agile, and Analytical. These are three strengths that seem to fit with his style. He may not be super-fast or strong but with his style he doesn’t really need it.

For weaknesses perhaps have Easily enraged, not physically strong, and low stamina. What you have now are situational or disadvantages, these will work as weaknesses. Easily enraged-loses his strategy, not physically strong- hits may do less damage but as long as he keeps his strategy and attacks weak points this won’t be a problem, and low stamina-he tires quickly which would make sense with him smoking.

And that’s it! Just add the second password and tweak these things and he should be all set~

[deathchorde]

Password added.

Long range portion of fighting style changed to specify shout blasts as a part of it, as well other portions.

Fixed strengths/weaknesses.

and toned abilities to match his smoking habit.

..should be ready to fly.

[Rylux]

Alright that's it! Feel free to begin roleplaying at any time~