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Post by Eavan Flanagan on Apr 23, 2015 20:31:52 GMT -5
Flanagan; Eavan;Meister
Name: Eavan Flanagan
Nickname: None that she know's of.
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Race: Meister
Position: Student
Class: One Star
Partner: No one yet
A Strong Body
Picture: 
Appearance: Before the day's of all the training, Eavan use to have a slim body and curvy waistline...but not now. Her body has changed gaining a modest amount of muscles upon her body, mostly on her upper arms and legs region though she still has a slim figure. Last time she had checked her height had stopped at five feet nine inches and she has kept her weight at one-hundred forty-five pounds...which is one thing she is very proud of.
Beautiful hazel eyes are what people are greeted with when being introduced to Eavan, and see her with a dainty nose and subtle lips. Long flowing brown hair is something Eavan gained from her mother, and it also seems to argue with both of them on how it wishes to be done up, so most of the time people will see her in either a ponytail or just letting if flow.Not many people notice her with makeup on, because her father forbids her to put anything really on...believing it would attract the wrong attention and the only jewerly she is does wear is a bright pink bracelet she gained from her grandmother.
Her clothing style is what her mother considers 'tom-boyish', which mean's she wears either boy shorts often colored or plain white. They don't extend any further then past half her upper leg region, something her father doesn't quite approve of. Colored or white tank-tops, short-sleeved or just t-shirts are also something Eavan wears, it all kinda depends on her mood. The only one item her mother does like is a yellow semi-dress Eavan wear's which reveal's most of her other clothing. For shoes, she does seem to enjoy wearing either black army boots or colored small heeled shoes. During the fall and winter months, Eavan ditches all this and enters her 'yoga' faze that consists of an all black or brown yoga outfit, her black army boots and her hair is up in a bun.
If she was asked to a family function or possibly in the near future some form of a party, Eavan would go all out and wear some sort of a dress. This dress would either something her mother made up on the fly, or she would buy it with her allowance. These dresses seem to differ due her and her mother's idea of the perfect outfit. As her mother would make something that sparkles, frilly and colorful...Eavan would just choose something that is plain and silk. Her shoes would probably be a little more high heeled, and she would try to fight her hair to place it in a long braid, straighten it, pigtail's, headbands, and if all else fails have her mother bun it.
Height: 5'9
Weight: 145 lbs
Fighting Style: Due to never truly being in any fight against supernatural beings, Eavan would rely on the moves she learned from female wrestling. She will move fast on her feet and try to perform some sort of combo move on her oppenent, whether it be the 'Attacking the Face' or the 'Standing Headlock'.
If all else fail's Eavan will start punching and kicking the hell out of the creature...trying to wear it down.
Personality: Ever since she could remember Eavan was being drilled the ideal's of loyalty, honor, bravery, compassion, and devotion by not only her parent's but many adults. Her father taught her that if she didn't stand for these things, that she wasn't being her true self. But beside it all, Eavan is one of the friendliest people anyone would ever meet, and she would bend over backwards to help those in need. When anyone is feeling sad or lonely, Eavan often tries to cheer them up by making a funny face or telling a horrible joke just to see them laugh.
She just loves going to school, glancing at all the other miesters and weapons wondering if sheall be ever good enough to gain a weapon. When Eavan is with her friends they alwayss gossip knowing each other can put trust among all others. They mostly talk about the other cute boys, who would be their perfect weapon and where they want to go with their life. The only terrible thing about school are the tests...these things screw Eavan up badly, so much she starts biting her nails just at the thought of having to take one. Even when she gets Bc, it really isn'tt good enough and asks for a re-test knowing she could have done better.
Though Eavan knew if she ever was on a mission, her attitude about life had to compete change. There would be no more carefree, happy child...but more a stern, precise woman who has to take down her target no matter what. She'd have to work together not only with her weapon, but possibly others as well. Keeping a cool head would be the only way she get better in the road ahead. Of course mistakes will be made, and she cant keep pushing herself down but forward.
Inside the Soul
Abilities: Unlike her father and uncle, Eavan has gained the Soul Perception but isn't very good at using it. Distance wise is mostly five or six feet with her, and she can seem to sense how many people are there, not what they seem to be.
Resonances:
Out of your Mind Strengths: Agile, High Endurance, High Stamina
Weaknesses: Lack of Intelligence, Lack of combat experience, Lack of Balance
Hobbies: Reading, wrestling, drawing, horseback riding
Likes: Hot tea, diet beverages, chips, roses
Dislikes: Spiders, Thunderstorms, Snakes, Needles
Aspirations: She would like to know what she was truly meant for this world.
History: The birth of Eavan was considered a 'miracle' baby to her parent's and the most happiest memory they had during the winter season in Ireland. After so many year's of trying so many things the Flanagans were considering adoption when Mrs. Shauna Flanagan learned she was pregnant. Her father Kevin was overjoyed by this idea as was Eavan's grandmother Deidre and her uncle Kevan. She was brought into this wonderful world at eight o'clock at night on December 19th. Everyone took pictures and wished the family all so many lovely future's together.
Growing up the family weren't really rich but weren't starving either, they were content at their home on 140 Baggot Street and Eavan was often seen over her uncle's home. He would take her horseback riding, teach her the basic's of irish stick fighting, this ended though when her mother learned of this, and didn't want Eavan to hurt herself, so instead he allowed her to help feed the horses and brush their mane. When she turned ten, Eavan started learning female wrestling the one sport her mother hated to a passion. Then something strange started happening, Eavan started noticing these small little orb's here and there. After speaking to her parent's about this, they decided to have a family supper and tell Eavan everything. Sitting at the kitchen table, her father spoke first explaining he and her uncle was retired meister's, how this world is inhabitant by evil creatures, witches all the works.
After he was done talking the whole family just sat there and waited for Eavan to say something. First she coughed and then wiped her mouth with the napkin, and then asked what had to be done next. That was when her grandmother spoke out a certain school which was created for herself and people like her, that were not only trained in the art's of developing their skill's but also fighting these evil creatures. Before deciding on what to do, Deidre came over to Eavan and held her granddaughter in her arm's, telling her it'll be alright and that everything will make sense when she arrives. Eavan cried for a few moment's but her grandmother took off her pink bracelet and put it on Eavan because she knew how much Eavan loved it. When it was all planned out, Eavan learned this place was in Nevada and that she was going to attend the Shibusen.
Extra Notes: sloppy makeouts
Behind the strings
Alias: Nips
Other characters: None
Face Claim: Alice Gehabich-Bakugan-Eavan Flanagan
RP Sample:
Oh god why?! Why did this place have to be in Nevada, a place that was so hot...it could either cook eggs or bake bread. Or for her possibly both, which technically wouldn't be a bad thing, just not at this very moment. The walk to her dorm room was quite tedious, seeing how it was only Eavan and her father making the trip to her dorm room, her mother opting to stay behind at the new house they bought with the old house money.
The small dorm room Eavan was now standing in seemed strange to her but also warming...if that was possible. Watching the minutes go by on the small red clock she had lying on her now bare bed Eavan seemed to daze out only to be brought back to the present era by her father, who lightly tapped her on the shoulder. "Penny for your thoughts?" he asked giving her a big smile, his teeth glistening showing how proud he was she was doing this.
"Do you think I can do this?" Eavan asked him nervously while shifting from one foot to the other. It's not like she didn't want to be here or do this, but she was just scared. Not only would she be partly away from her parents...but all of this would be foreign to her, and it made her anxious not to mention a little nauseous. Though she didn't tell him that. Placing two arms around her, Eavan felt her father give her a big hug holding her strongly in his arms. Now Eavan knew her father was a stern man, all the year's being a meister would do that to you, so for him to show her this emotion meant something and she wrapped her arms around him. "Listen it's going to be alright, your going to do fine...just do the best you can, and remember to be yourself""Alright" was all she murmured while still embraced in his warm chest.
When Eavan released him, she came over to all the other boxes and opened the first one noticing a picture of her, him and her mother fishing. She was holding up the biggest fish from that day. "I don't remember packing this" "That's because I did, I thought you would want something small to talk to, when you can't see us" Smiling she tear up for a few moment's before wiping the tear's away and walked over to the metal desk and placed the picture near a lamp. "There when I have to study and get all flustered I'll look at this picture"
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Post by Rylux on Apr 26, 2015 21:13:28 GMT -5
Alright there are a few things that need a bit of tweaking
Class: It is just NOT. As a note it is recommended your first character be a One star so they can go on missions sooner but that is up to you, plus she sounds more like a One star as she is now.
Appearance: Look this over again. There are a few grammar issues and some mistakes with editing. For example
“Bright, beautiful bouncing hazel eyes adore Eavan's face as does her lips, but supringsly not her nose or ears.”
Right now it reads like hazel eyes are on her lips but surprisingly not her nose or ears.
Weight: Just pick one. Either is fine but just stick to one
Fighting Style: If Irish stick fighting is major to her fighting style definitely include it but you go into great detail on things that don’t matter. What type of wood the stick is made of doesn’t matter as she won’t be using it on missions.
You have too much here. You give some detail on stick fighting and boxing then just mention gymnastics and fencing. She would be maybe capable of this but hardly anything close to proficient in any. I suggest sticking to one or maybe two. Also give less of a description on the style(s) themselves and more on how she fights.
Soul Perception: You just need to describe the ability not give history that should just be in the history section.
Strengths/Weaknesses: Her having a lack of combat skills doesn’t seem to make much sense with her knowing 2 different styles of fighting, I believe you are looking for lacks combat experience. Likewise her having low endurance contradicts saying that she can swim all day and night.
History:-You say her grandmother was excited to have a grandchild but it seems she has an older brother?
-Soul perception at her level needs to be activated. Even if unaware of it she needs to actively activate the ability.
-So she started gymnastics at 10 but not the other fighting till after entering high school. If she’s 14 now that’s about 1-2 years of practice for that. I would change her fighting style to focus on gymnastics with some influence from one fighting style which would give her some level of knowledge but nowhere near proficient in fighting, or have her learn a fighting style earlier so she has time to develop with it.
-The name of the school is just Shibusen
-You make it sound like she didn’t want to go to the school. If that is the case there is no reason for her to go.
Extra: –Just delete the weapon information as it isn’t relevant
-There are a few spelling/grammar errors so just read things aver again
-Please use the proper app. All you need to do is copy the code at the bottom of the template and fill it in. That gives proper spacing and formatting to make the profile easier to read.
-You don’t need to bold and enlarge those words
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Post by Eavan Flanagan on Apr 27, 2015 22:19:48 GMT -5
I believe I did everything you said that needed tweaking.
Also if the app. is off somehow I am sorry, after using my spell checker it somehow screwed it up, and I tried fixing it. If it isn't I will do it again.
Thank you!
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Post by Rylux on Apr 28, 2015 21:01:47 GMT -5
Looking good but a few more details need to be worked out.
Fighting Style: Right off the bat there is a glaring problem. Military hand combat, gymnastics, wrestling, and stick fighting. Like I said, one or two fighting styles no more. You also never mention anything about the military in her history so I see no reason for her to have this.
From what you have I would drop military combat entirely because it makes no sense so that’s 3 combat aspects. Gymnastics contradicts a weakness so one of those must be changed. Her uncle taught her stick fighting before she was 10 and that’s never mentioned again so that could just be removed entirely. That would leave her wrestling as a primary fighting style and if you change the weakness she would have gymnastics to supplement it. You also bring up stealth somewhat which really doesn’t seem to come from anywhere or mix with anything.
Why would she wait till she’s on the brink of death to use her weapon? On a real mission your weapon is the only thing that will have any effect on a kishin egg in the first place. Also what do you mean her weapon is some sort of singlestick because it isn’t. She has no weapon. You should mention how she fights in general but not mention any sort of weapon because what that weapon will be depends of who ends up partnering with her.
I feel you may be under the assumption that she needs to be a powerful fighter and that is not the case. Obviously she is going to be fighting but by no means does that mean she needs to excel at it. From her history it seems like she would be unaccustomed to combat in general let alone knowledgeable of various ways to fight. My advice is to just pick one fighting style and make it so she is believably alright at it and go from there. Gymnastics: competent in that and wings it for attacks, wrestling: tries to takedown and pin her enemies while unaccustomed to using weapons. Stick fighting: knows the moves of that and has no idea what to do with any other weapon.
Whatever you decide it needs more detail than it has. Say what she knows one time and describe how she fights for the rest of the section. Does she focus on using her fist or her legs? Straight hits or grabs and throws? Is she solid and sturdy or does she move around? These are the sort of things to describe.
Abilities: She doesn’t need to have all these drawbacks to her perception if you want her to she can but it is not necessary.
Weaknesses: These would work but you state earlier that she knows gymnastics which sort of contradicts the lack of balance.
History:-She wouldn’t be able to ‘peer into someone’s soul’ just see the orb
Fix these up and she should be good to go.
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Post by Eavan Flanagan on Apr 28, 2015 21:31:38 GMT -5
Ok, I finally think I fixed what you told me done.
I not only removed (hopefully) the gymnastics plus the irish stick fighting and singlestick...but kept the female wrestling.
I also fixed the history and took out the part with her ability.
On a side note: the two moves, I found them on a female wrestling site, if you wish for me to describe them or have the site yourself, please let me know.
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Post by Rylux on Apr 29, 2015 22:59:17 GMT -5
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