Toby Markov~ Student~ Weapon~

[vermilionsoul]

Last Name; First Name;Race

Name: Tobius Markov



Nickname: Toby



Age: 16



Gender: Male



Race: Weapon



Position: Student



Class: One Star



Partner: Trying to find one



A Strong Body



Appearance: He has dark brown eyes, and light brown hair. Wears dark blue headphones when alone.

Always wears his favorite grey jacket unzipped and a black DWMA shirt underneath with blue jeans.



Height: 6'1''



Weight: 170 lbs



Fighting Style: Tries to dodge all of the opponents attacks and studies their movements, until he

can predict what they will most likely do next



Personality: Always tries to smile, no matter the situation. He keeps his calm when in trouble and

thinks of multiple ways out of the problem. He always treats his friends and allies with respect

and kindness. He mostly lets other people decide small things for him. He tries to stay cheerful

and brave so he can protect others.



Inside the Soul

Weapon form: Katar: basically looks like brass knuckles but with a long blade on the end. The

color of the blade is black and the handle is dark blue.



Partial Form: Turn both or one hand into a long blade as well as have a blade extend from the

bottom of his feet.



Abilities: Soul resonance is able to make the blades shake and create a loud metal ringing that

is deafening to everyone around except the weapon and meister.


Out of your Mind

Strengths: Able to keep calm in a battle, very agile, and can battle independently.



Weaknesses: Can't take very heavy hits, doesn't deal well with insanity, and has kind of poor eyesight.



Hobbies: Mostly wanders Death City, works, and sleeps.



Likes: Likes the color blue, soup, hanging out with friends, and music.



Dislikes: Dislikes being alone, darkness, complete silence, and snakes.



Aspirations: Wants to become a Death Scythe and live in Death City to keep it safe.



History: Toby lived with his parents at their restaurant and worked there ever since they moved when he

was 2. He worked tirelessly at the restaurant and studied hard at school all his life. One day after

class behind the school building an upperclassmen was picking on one of his friends. Toby just came

started to leave school because he usually always stayed late to finish his work.

He heard the voice of his friend quivering and crying from behind the school. Toby ran to see what

was the matter, as soon as he turned corner he saw his friend being held by the collar of his shirt

with a bloody nose and a bruise on his cheek. His friend begged that if they'd let him go he'd give

them what they want the next day. The upperclassmen laughed and mocked his crying. Then, one of them

were getting ready to punch him again.

By that point Toby was furious and sprinted straight towards them. He slid under one of them and

upper-cutted him. The other two turned towards Toby, letting Toby's friend go, and started to throw

punches at him instead. His friend ran off stumbling with fear, while Toby was pegged by the upperclassmen's

fists. He felt the pain immediately and flew back. Toby stood back up and wobbled, he hadn't ever been hit before.

He felt the pain and fear grip him and he couldn't move. The upperclassmen were laughing again "What's the

matter? Scared?" Toby was violently shaking and was paralysed.

Toby felt everything suddenly go dark and his senses were dulled. He couldn't feel anything. All of the world

seemed to be shut out. He woke back up on the ground with the upperclassmen bruised and cut passed out on the ground

around him. Toby stood up and looked at his hands, they weren't hands any more. He had 2 feet long blades that were

dripping blood.

Toby ran back home in a horrified panic back to his parents. By this time the blades turned back to

hands. He was becoming almost border-line insane when he reached his home. He questioned his parents about everything

that happened to him and what he did to the upperclassmen. His parents explained that his father was a weapon at

Shibusen, and knew that one day Toby would be a weapon too. Toby went through therapy for his trauma and later recieved

a letter from Shibusen inviting him to enroll. Toby quickly took the chance and packed for the adventure he was waiting for.



Extra Notes: He plays acoustic guitar.


Behind the strings

Alias: Toby always tries to do the right thing, even if he has to sacrifice himself, but will find a way for everyone else

to live a better life.





RP Sample: In his parents restaurant before being accepted to Shibusen. A drunken customer waltz in.

Toby: "Hello, how may I serve you today?"



Customer: "Shut up brat. Hey where is that hot waitress chick with the huge-"



Toby: "Um. Excuse me sir but, do you think you can try to be a little more kind?" *irritated*



Customer: "Whatever kid, just get me a table next to some ladies."



Toby: "You're going to have to wait a while the place is full at the moment."



Customer: "What are you saying kid? A paying customer like me isn't going to be given the service he deserves?" *smirks menacingly*



Toby: "No it's just-"



Customer: "Just what? Give me a table or I'll clear one myself!" *arm turns into a sledgehammer*



Toby: *thinks* "Whoa this guy is a weapon too?"



Customer: "Now which will it be?"



Toby: "I would gladly get you a table if you just wait."



Customer: "I don't like to wait kid, so I guess I'll try to clear my own!" *runs forward and smashes a table with his sledgehammer*



Toby: "Don't tear up our restaurant!" *dashes after the man and blocks one his next smashes on the tables*



Customer: "Dumb brat, get out of the way!" *picks up Toby and hits him like a baseball into the wall*



Toby: *stands up after nailing the wall and becomes serious* "I guess I'll have to use force." *arm turns into a blade*



Customer: "Oh no! He's gonna hurt me!" *sarcastic* *laughs*



Toby: *vanishes and reappears near the man* *cuts at the man's leg and disappears again*



Customer: "Gah! You'll pay for that brat!"



Toby: *reappears behind the man and elbows him in the back of the neck knocking him unconscience* "You could've just waited like I said."

[Rylux]

Alright this is going to need a lot of work so let’s start from the top.

Format: Please use the provided format with proper spacing and tags. Also look at other profiles to see how it should look.

Appearance: This is about 169 words too short. This should be a solid 200 words/2 paragraphs at a minimum. Describe how the hair looks, if he has any distinguishing features, etc. Also we follow the manga so it is Shibusen not DWMA.

Fighting Style: Trying to not get hit is about as basic as you can get. How proficient is he at this? What does he use to fight if he has to? Fist, feet, elbows, grabs? This needs a lot more elaboration.

Personality: This needs to be at least 3 solid paragraphs or near 300 words to reach the bare minimum. Explain how he is in different situations. How is he in class or on missions? Around friends compared to strangers? I doubt he remains consistently happy in every circumstance.

Weapon Form: Don’t describe what a weapon looks like by comparing it to another weapon, just describe it. How does the blade look? The handle? A quick google search alone shows 3 different kind of blades for a katar.

Partial Form: Yeah no. You get one partial form to start so you could choose one hand to have him transform into the blade.

Abilities: As it shows on the profile form an ability and a resonance are different things. He couldn’t possibly have a resonance because he doesn’t have a meister. Scrap this entirely. He most likely would not start with any abilities.

Strengths: Very agile is the only strength you have. Keeping calm is an advantage, and battling independently is something he would not be able to be at a mission level.

Weaknesses: What does can’t take heavy hits mean? It sounds like he would have low defense which would relate to all hits. Doesn’t deal well with insanity is very vague but sounds like he is mentally weak or susceptible to madness. And kind of has poor eyesight is not a weakness. Nearsighted, farsighted, blind, something like that would count but ‘kind of’ having bad eyesight does not.

struggleofsouls.proboards.com/thread/1046/strengths-weaknesses here is a guide to help distinguish what works as a strength or weakness.

History: Before anything else. Please format this into paragraphs so it is more easily readable.

-Where did they move from?/to?
-How did he hear his friend crying from behind the school if he was most likely at the front of the school?
-“Toby felt everything suddenly go dark and his senses were dulled.” 9 times out of 10 this is something bad and shouldn’t be done.
-Yeah so he blacks out and beats up the clearly stronger people that outnumber him. At the best this is serious madness and at worst an excuse to make him seem like a badass.
- Because of the lack of detail I’m going to assume extremes here and say Toby is 13 and the two upperclassmen are 18. Firstly why are they beating up a 13 year old? Even if he did manage to uppercut one he has no fighting experience and that should have done nothing.
-Not please explain how you expect me to believe an untrained 13 year old beat up at least two 18 year olds who were at least strong enough to lift up another 13 year old with one hand.
-Again, one hand could transform but not both.
-In this world where insanity is a real serious thing he wouldn’t be “border-line insane” he would be a panicked, scared child.
-His parents wouldn’t know he would be a weapon they could just believe he would awaken his abilities someday.
-Even knowing the potential for him to become a weapon I doubt his parents would be calm about him violently attacking people and living up to the stereotype some people have against weapons.
-You gloss over him getting therapy and never mention any sort of impact of the trauma on his personality. How did this impact him? How does it still affect him? How long did he have therapy for?
-He would apply to Shibusen they wouldn’t seek him out. After what he did they would be more likely to not want him to join and just be watched for the potential to fall to madness.

Alias: This should be what you the player want to be referred to or what you go by in the cbox. What you have now sounds like information that should be in his personality.

RP Sample: Please use paragraph form and not script form.
Color codes are generally used to distinguish speaking

-The likely hood of an adult weapon who has control of his weapon form using it as such is incredibly slim. He would have most likely attended Shibusen and been taught to avoid this exact situation.
-If he blocked an attack from an adult weapon without transforming he just broke his arms.
-If he got hit by a sledgehammer into a wall he probably broke many more bones and lost consciousness.
-So he can vanish and reappear? No, simply not possible.
-And this untrained 15-16 year old who has never fought before just knows how to knock a grown man unconscious with a strike to the back of the neck? I’m having a tough time accepting that.

Extra: –Please read the rules and character rules, you are missing something.
-Please change your account name to match the character.
-Please look at other accepted profiles and the many guides on the site to help write your application.
-Look over the application as there are a few spelling/grammar mistakes
-I would suggest avoiding fights in your application all together. If you must include them keep it consistent with the rest of your profile. In one fight he did not stay calm and in the other he did not dodge, countering how he stays calm and tries to dodge. There is no need to have him fight before reaching the school.

-This site is of an intermediate to advanced writing level and this application does not seem to meet that. If you require help please ask for it either on the cbox or through pming me. I would be more than happy to help you work on this step by step if you ask for it.