Alright let’s get started
Firstly please follow the template for witch profiles, it’s there for a reason
Age: This should also have the age she looks
Appearance: This needs to be two paragraphs at least so at minimum 200 words.
-White skin is a no, witches still look like humans. Pale skin is fine but not pure white.
-Bunny ears are also a no, witches do not have constant obvious features of their animal theme. If she were to have a constant animal feature it would be something minor like buck teeth.
Height/Weight: Finding an accurate level for this was difficult but at her height she should weigh around 59lbs to be considered a healthy weight. Please change this to be accurate, if you want her to weigh less make it close to 59lbs and include that she is frail to her weaknesses.
Fighting Style: This should be how she fights in general not how she uses spells. Look at other profiles for examples but it should be much more general than what spells she uses and how.
-Do not reference canon characters
Personality: This needs to be at least 3 paragraphs so around 300 words.
-You cannot have interactions with canon characters
-Do not use DWMA as we follow the manga and use Shibusen
-She would not be allowed anywhere near Shibusen as she is a witch
-If a meister caught her they would kill her and take her soul without hesitation
Spells: –Firstly this should be a list of spells like other witches. You should also list soul protect, flight, and animal transformation if she has them. Not including the previous three she is allowed 5 spells. She also needs chants for her spells.
-She can’t trap people like Free as that is spacial magic, the magic of the witch queen Maba
-The rest that you have doesn’t seem to follow her theme or animal
Animal Familiar: Just put rabbits
Magical Theme: Pick one. Currency, gold, and jewels can all be different things.
Strengths/Weaknesses: How is defense a strength for her? She doesn’t seem like she has strong defense at all. How is she intelligent as nothing she has in the rest of her profile shows this?
Being maimed is not an acceptable weakness.
Please have a balanced 3 strengths and 3 weaknesses that relate to the character.
History: Firstly her history needs to be at least 300-400 words.
-Where was she born?
-No, she can’t meet Noah or Gopher
-Noah wasn’t killed off by Shibusen
-If she was almost killed by Shibusen I would expect to hear more about it than just a passing statement.
-People wouldn’t write books about a 30 year old witch who had done nothing of importance
-Shibusen wouldn’t send 2 teams after a witch, let alone a one star witch
-No, she can’t meet Giriko or turn people into gold unless that was a certain spell for her, which she wouldn’t have as a one star witch.
-Why would she not remember some portion of time?
-If she didn’t have a spell by age 40 she wouldn’t do much as a witch and probably have acted like a normal human unless she was around other witches
-She wouldn’t be around meisters let alone interact with them and take dares
-She wouldn’t sleep for 10 years and it wouldn’t make her smarter. Unless she had an animal theme of something that hibernated this is simply ridiculous
Extra Notes: Remove that this is your main oc as it is unimportant. Misspelling due to typing too fast is not an excuse and you will be held to the same spelling and grammar standards as everyone else. Why would she hate her underlings?
Other Characters: Leave this blank as you don’t have other characters on here
RP Sample: This needs to be redone completely. 1, you need to put it in paragraph style like everyone else. 2, A witch can’t be in Death City. 3, this is way too short and needs to be at least 250 words as thatis the minimum word count for the site.
Additional:- Read the rules and character rules as you are missing something from them and I feel you need to read them to get a grasp of the basics of the site and how characters work
-You have numerous spelling and grammar errors so please slow down when writing and use a program like Microsoft word to check your spelling and grammar.
-You need to change your account name to that of your character.
-Look at other witch profiles to see what sort of content we are looking for.
