Zane Arterius

[Zane Arterius]

Arterius; Zane; Human

Name: Zane Arterius

Nickname: Z, Zay(Parents), Zaney (Older Brother)

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Race: Weapon

Position: Student

Class: One Star

Partner: None

A Strong Body

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Appearance: Zane has short red hair, with blue eyes and tanned Caucasian skin. When he's at school he wears a Black and green coat with a white under shirt with black pants that have grey and purple stripes with white red and black shoes as well as black and red gloves. On some occasions wear's a light plain brown jacket with a red and black baseball cap. He carries with him at all times a small blue pendent with a ruby in the center with a silver chain around his neck that he keeps hidden under his shirt. When he's not wearing gloves, on his right index finger he wears a silver ring with his last name on it ( Which now has a scratched line mark going through it) given to him by his father after Zane's first big fight as a symbol of being a member of the family.

When Zane is not at school he wears a white tank top with his pendent visible, with black shoes and basketball shorts.While wearing the tank top it's clearly visible that Zane is muscular showing just how strong he is. When looking at his chest you can see old bruises and marks from all the fighting that he used to do growing up. These day's he doesn't really show a smile often keeping a blank face through most of his conversations except during battle where he grin's a lot. Originally he had blonde hair, but after a while he decided to change it to red which sometimes the blonde can be seen under.

Height: 5' 9.

Weight: 160

Fighting Style: Being from a Mixed martial arts family he focus on the fighting style known as " Muay Thai" relies on his speed to get up close to his opponent as fast as he can so he can use his strength to take him out with a mixture of jabs, hooks, kicks, knee thrusts and an occasional grapple, he does everything he possibly can to being up close for the whole fight. If he lands the first hit he starts to get cocky which in turn he starts to leave himself more open to attacks. Even in the face of defeat, as long as he can stand he will continue the fight even if he knows he can't win. While in weapon form he tends to be more relaxed and tries to make defensive advice towards whoever is wielding him but if sees an opening he wont hesitate to yell at his meister to go all out.

Personality: The past few years have had a negative effect towards his personality, he has grown to have trust issues with people and it's hard for him to share with just anybody how he's feeling. When he's with people he trusts he'll occasion cracks a smile, he's caring and he'll do whatever is necessary to keep them safe. Since joining the school he feels awkward trying to converse with fellow student's, the feeling of acceptance is rare for him him and so when in conversation he tends to look down when he speaks avoiding making eye contact.

When Zane was younger and around his brother he was a completely different person, always smiling, laughing and cracking jokes. While at the same time very competitive trying to show to his brother that he's strong and can take him on, nowadays thinking about his brother he feels betrayal. Zane's father brings out the hate and sorrow in him, on occasion when he's alone he will cry thinking about the mother he never knew and how his father and brother abandoned him upon learning his weapon abilities. When asked about his family, Zane gets defensive about it and quickly changes the subject.

Although he is shy towards other students, whenever he's with a team his shyness is replaced by confidence and shows more of a team leader personality, constantly encouraging his fellow members as well as holding longer conservations in battles. Whenever they return from their assignments he reverts back to his quiet shy personality.

Inside the Soul

Weapon form:

A black basket-hilted Schiavona with some red on it, The blade itself is 42 inchs and black with red line going down the middle, the hilt is standard, and the grip is wrapped in black and red and long enough to be wielded by two hands.

Partial Form: A 22 inch dull blade replaces left arm from the elbow to his hand. He can control it at will, but when his left arm receives tremendous pain, it appears as in involuntary reaction.

Abilities: None

Resonances: N/A

Out of your Mind

Strengths: Physically Strong, Agile, Mixed Martial Arts Training

Weaknesses: Strategically Inept, 1 year old left arm fracture (The Ulna & Radius bone didn't heal properly causing some left arm movement delays because of the pain, punching or blocking risk arm fracture again.), Total Color Blindness (inherited from mothers side).

Hobbies: Training (Push-ups, sit ups, lifting ect.), Playing Guitar (Grandfather taught), Reading ( Books about adventure)

Likes: Winning, Working out, Challenges, Peace and Quiet, Makeouts

Dislikes: Giving up, Losing, Bully's, Things not finished, Sloppy

Aspirations: Becoming a Death Scythe, Travel the world to find where he belongs, Leave his mark in history.

History: Zane Arterius,named after his grandfather who was just a simple guitar maker, born and raised in a small town in Georgia. His father was known throughout the state as an undefeated fighter, a legacy he wanted to start and have all of the Arterius men to carry on for generations. Zane never knew his mother, by the time he turned 2 his mother, while out of state visiting family, was killed by an unknown weapon succumbed by madness. Since that incident the unknown dark weapon vanished, whether or not the academy dealt with it, or simple went into hiding remained unclear and plagued Zane's father with thoughts of "was she in the wrong place at the wrong time?" or was there some motive as to why she was targeted". Throughout his life, his father refused to talk about his mother so he never knew anything specific about what she was like or how she died, just what she looked like from photos. Drake vaguely remembers what happened, but all he knew is his father blames a weapon and his complete hatred towards them, a feeling that Drake began to share with his father. As soon as Zane and his older brother Drake came of age, he started to train them. Drake become undefeated in Georgia, and by the time he was 18 instead of making a professional career out of it, he chose to become a trainer, which their father accepted since Drake already gained the reputation as undefeated like him. When Zane became 8 years old his training began and had one goal, do what his father didn't and travel the world and be the greatest undefeated MMA fighter, and for the next 7 years Zane trained with his father and brother, winning numerous fights with kids his age and the occasional couple years older kids. When he wasn't training he lived a normal life, hanging with his friends, seeing movies with his brother, Father sons baseball games, as well as attending school. He excelled in math, and though he enjoyed learning, he had no intention of attending college.

At the age of 16 Zane was entered in his first official tournament of kids the age of 15-18 out in California, which he wasn't favored to win. Over the course of the tournament he struggled in every fight, but still managed to grapple and uppercut his way to pull through and win each fight. Finally the championship round against 18 year old Jeffery Parks, who was known as the "demolisher" for his ability to release an onslaught of attacks, not giving his opponents a moment to strike till they were knocked unconscious. All money was placed on Jeffery and to a big surprise, against all odds Zane came out on top. 5 minutes into the fight and it was over, at the start of the round Zane went full speed, utilizing a mixture of knee and kicking techniques, not letting Jeffery get the chance to make an offensive move, till finally Zane found a great opening. Jeffery moved his arms downward to block the repeated knee blows which left his upper half exposed, using this opportunity he put all his strength in a left hook right to the face for the winning blow. He was crowned the undefeated victor, proud of his victory, images of Zane's dream of become the worlds greatest fighter were filling his head and was looking forward to seeing what his future would bring. Sadly this moment wasn't to last long, for later that night his world was turned upside down.

Later that night while Zane was waiting outside for his family, he was approached by 5 men who began to surround him. They were angry because they bet a lot of money on him to lose, being drunk they decided to get revenge on him. Being able to hold some of them off, it became to much for him and was overwhelmed, they managed to get Zane on the ground when one of them pulled out a metal bat. After a couple swings of the bat they proceeded to break Zane's left arm, at that moment he realized he had the power of a weapon. The second his arm broke and he felt the tremendous pain his arm became a black blade and stabbed one of the attackers, shocked by this all the attackers but the one stabbed ran. Zane then heard a scream and looked to his right so see his family looking at him with scared faces, calling him "monster" and "stay away". So after that Zane ran from his life, feeling abandoned he spent the next few months traveling finding a place to belong while focusing on trying to control his abilities, till finally he learned of the academy and set off to start his new life there.

Extra Notes: None at the moment.

Behind the strings

Alias: Siy

Other characters: None

Face Claim: Ethan Waber, Phantasy Star

RP Sample: It was a rainy Thursday night a few months after Zane's weapon incident, living on the streets in a lively city in California, despite the rain the streets were crowded with people and their umbrellas. As the rain continues to fall it's unclear whether the sound of people laughing outshines the sound of the actual rain as it falls upon the city, the lights from buildings and streets are giving the city a magical glow with the lights reflection gleaming from the water puddles. The people of city go about their nights as if there isn't a care in the world, oblivious to what really happens deep in the dark corners of their city. At 8pm a bell chime from the cities clock tower is heard throughout the city, and looking down upon the it in a group of people walking up and down the street a man wearing a black and green jacket, Zane Arterius is seen standing still looking at the clock tower as the rain drips down his face.

After the 4th bell the clock tower once again laid silent, Zane looked around at all the people and wondered to himself "How can people just not give a care in the world?". He closes his eyes and with a small smirk he shrugged his head and proceeded to walk down the street with both is hands in his pockets. As he walked by the crowds he started to reminisce about a memory he once shared with his brother when they were kids, how they used to run up and down their hometown streets playing tag and no having a care in the world. His brother Drake would turn to him and with a smile on his face told Zane "Zaney, when were older you and I are going to see the world, brothers taking on the world!" Drake would proceed to grab him by the head and mess Zane's hair up and say "Together always!". The memory started to fade from Zane's mind and in a soft voice he said "together....always?". In an instant a new memory flooded into his mind, of the night when he first discovered his weapon abilities, and the scared look he saw his brother and parent's gave him and how afraid of him they were. In an angry low voice he said "Together always Drake?, where are you brother? do you even consider me as your brother anymore?".

Zane continued walking down the busy street until he came upon an open alley entrance where he heard a cry for help. Zane stopped where he was with his right foot in mid air and looked to his right to see a old man getting robbed at gun point by a thug wearing nothing but all black. Zane looked around at the other people walking by, unfazed by what was happening in the alley as if they didn't see or hear anything. Zane proceed to walk into the alley and picked up a piece of wood that was just laying there and chucked it at the thugs hand forcing him to drop his gun. The old man took this opportunity to run out there saying thanks as he ran passed Zane. Angered by this the thug picked up his gun and pointed it at Zane's head and screamed "YOU PUNK" as he squeezed the trigger. With the bullet whizzing by, Zane just stood there unflinching as the bullet headed towards him until it made contact with Zane, skimming the side of his cheek leaving a bleeding cut mark. As the blood began to drip down the side of Zane's face mixed with the rain it created a somewhat light red puddle under his feet. Zane gave out a big sigh and chuckled and replied "Punk eh? I guess that makes you a coward, using a weapon on unarmed innocent people, it also makes you a loser for not knowing how to aim right". In a roar of a voice the thug yelled "Why you..." as he squeezed the trigger 3 more times. As the bullets penetrated the rain drops falling from the sky, Zane gripped his hands and made a dash for the thug using the water on the ground from the rain to slide closer. The first bullet completely missed the second grazed his right leg almost making him fall, and the third made full contact with his left arm, in a scream of pain Zane's blade sprouted from his left arm. The thug shocked by what he saw and the speed Zane continued to approached him at, prepared to fire again, but before he could Zane was already up close, grabbing his gun and forcing his left arm up to the thugs face with the blade penetrating the cheek. Zane began to grin as he whispered in the thugs ear "It's over". Within a split second he mad a thrust with his left knee into the thugs stomach with enough force to knock him back on the ground a few feet. As the thug looked up, Zane's back was already facing toward him. The thug was able to see his reflection on the black blade coming out of his arm, dripping with water from the rain above. The thug, out of breathe said "you will pay for this weapon, one day!", Zane turned his head and replied "Bring it, but if I catch you hurting people again, I WILL END YOU!"

[The Sidhe]

Here we go!

Starting off simply, please make his name different from that of his faceclaim as that is just a touch too similar to be comfortable.

Next we ask that you up his weight a bit, as he’s still in the underweight category for his height class. Since you seem to be aiming to make him a physically stronger character, he would need to be between 157 and 165lbs.

We’d like you to add a bit more to his fighting style, mainly on what he specializes in. There’s a lot of mixed martial arts out there, but how does he make use of it? Does he use grapples, kicks, punches?

Unfortunately, you’re going to have to change his Weapon form, as there is already a Demon Rapier on the site. A few swords very similar to a Rapier are the Basket-hilted Sword and the Colichemarde. You can also refer to the Weapon List thread if you need more ideas.

Describe his partial form a bit more. Where does it come out of his left arm, which curved part of the blade?

His ability sounds far too much like a Resonance, please remove it.

For his strengths and weaknesses, the likelihood of him being an expert in anything at the age of seventeen is unlikely. Having him trained in mixed martial arts is more believable, plus it still counts as a strength. Describe his arm fracture a bit more in how it limits him and makes it a weakness. Also how color blind is he, what type of color blindness does he have? Depending on this, it may not count.

Onto the history.

What was his grandfather undefeated in? What you describe further on in his history sounds a lot like boxing, but please specify.

It’s hard to believe that an eight year old would be a world-wide undefeated fight unless he was fighting against those in his own age group. If that was the case, please specify.

In addition, from that point you skip over seven years of his life and we would like you to describe a bit more of what happens in these. There had to be more than just him fighting all the time.

Please clarify a bit how his partial form is triggered. The way it is worded right now is confusing and making it sound like the sword itself was in his left arm which is not how partial forms work. In addition, why are his parents anti-Weapon if they are from the USA? Shibusen is located in the USA, and even if he’s from a small town, it’s doubtful they would hate him so much to abandon him. It’s possible they would think of it as weird, but nothing too extreme considering that Shibusen is literally only a few states away.

In his RP sample, you’re going to need to change a few things. First, no dodging bullets, this ain’t the Matrix and having what is essentially a Resonance ability isn’t possible. Is the blade dripping with his blood or his opponents? If so than he cut him far more severely. Also clarify when and why he is in California.

You are missing something from the General and Character Rules.

You have numerous typos, please go through and fix as many as you can as they do make it difficult to read and understand what you’re saying.

Please fix these things and we’ll go from there!

[Zane Arterius]

Made all necessary changes and fixed some spelling stuff. I probably just made some new mistakes so just let me know what needs fixing .

[The Sidhe]

Just a few more little things! He’s almost there.

His partial should only take over one arm for one, so choose either his left or right forearm, preferably his left so his history will still make sense. Also if it had been broken previously, his partial would not be at full power due to the injury. The blade may be dulled or something like that. The chances of him transforming due to anger is also unlikely, thought the pain bit can stay. If that’s the only time he can transform into his partial, however, he should be in the NOT class since that is a substantial lack of control over his Weapon form. If you want to keep him a One Star, just give him normal control over it.

The next thing is more of a note just to be sure you’ve done your research. Total color blindness would mean Zane would only be able to see in a greyscale with black and white, and also that his vision could become blurry in brighter light. It’s an acceptable weakness, so he is balanced, but we’re making sure you’re aware is all. If you don’t want to go that far there’s also the most common Red/Green color blindness which we would happily accept.

For his history, why was his mother killed by a Weapon? Was is a dark Weapon, were they well on their way to madness, what?

We would also recommended adding a text color for him in your RP sample as it makes his dialogue easier to distinguish and read, plus it’s pretty standard on the site.

Apart from those few things, he looks good!

[Zane Arterius]

Fixed it . At first I wasn't sure what color blindness I was going to go with but I figured it would be a huge disadvantage if he was full on so I'm aware of the only seeing black and white. As for the mothers back story I couldn't find one I fully liked and since Zane didn't really know what happened I just left it blank, but I added in one .

[The Sidhe]

This character is accepted! Feel free to begin roleplaying with this character whenever you wish~