Brynowen St. Claire

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Basics



Name: Brynowen St. Claire



Nickname(s): Bryn, Strawberry, pain in the ass, sparrow or “the little sparrow” but this was only for her father and she’s never told anyone.



Age: 16



Gender: Female



Race: Meister



Position: Student



Class: One Star



Partner: N/A



A Strong Body



Picture: Coming soon

Appearance:
Standing at around 5’2” and weighing in at about 103 lbs, Brynowen is the definition of petite, often making her seem a lot younger than she actually is. She has a slim, yet feminine body with soft curves and a toned build. She is by no means a wafer, and has no problem showing off her surprising amount of strength whenever given the chance. She gives of an almost unwavering amount of confidence and a sense of dominance where ever she goes; a trait which can be seem through the way she carries herself.




Perhaps one of her more noticeable traits, she has long, bright red hair that falls in soft waves down to her mid back and drapes over her forehead in a bang. She has, big, bright blue eyes with a gold ring that circles her pupils and pale, ivory skin that pretty much deep fries in the sun. Small scars are scattered across her body, each coming with its own story that she’d be glad to tell you about.


Her attire usually consists of jean shorts, tank tops, and boots. Therefore, as can be expected, she can usually be seen in a pair of jean shorts, a cream colored tank top with a heart over her left breast, long socks, tall black boots (when she’s not running around barefoot), and her favorite leather jacket. She never wears jewelry, as she pretty much despises it, and she will almost never wear heals.




Height: 5’2”



Weight: 103 lbs



Fighting Style:

Despite her overly confidence, Brynowen understands that she is not a powerhouse and so therefore cannot just tackle a sumo wrestler to the ground. Due to her small size, Bryn is incredibly agile and quick on her feet. When attacking, she tends to avoid most attacks that would allow her opponent to grab her. Using a combination of acrobatics and martial arts, she relies heavily on her ability to get in and get out and then repeating before her target has the chance to recover; because if they can’t catch her, they can’t fight back, something that has worked brilliantly thus far.

Timing and precision is a huge part of her style, because one wrong move, one miscalculated step or flick of the wrist, may spell disaster. Thankfully however, this rarely occurs, as she has seems to be perfectly balanced and has seems to have a strange intuition on how her opponent is going to react.



When taking the offense, she tends to favor the element of surprise and prefers it when she takes on her victim from above. However, once the fight commences, its straight back to her original format.




Personality:


A self-proclaimed badass whose bark is just as bad as her bite, she sometimes has a problem with taking orders (especially when she doesn’t agree with them) and has an unwavering opinion about everything. She has a mischievous, almost dark charm about her and a natural charisma that somehow still draws people towards her. Typically, her own interests and desires seem to be the source of her actions; however, she does genuinely care about people, especially those she’s close to. Therefor, while acts of random kindness may not be all that common and may or may not include making the person beg for her assistances, she is not completely incapable of helping someone just for the hell of it with no benefit for her what so ever.

For the most part, Bryn is completely in love with herself and she shows this in every way possible. But this, in a way is to cover up a bit of insecurity that lies deep within her. Most people would not understand this, as she pretty much never, ever lets it show, but none the less its there. Because despite how protective she is, deep down she really wants someone to protect her. Somewhere hidden amongst the shadows of her mind dwells the frightened little girl that she use to be. It’s taken years for her heart to harden enough to keep her fear at bay, unwilling to show the weakness that lies dormant inside of her. She has to be a rock, not only for herself but for everyone else as well.



Among other things, Bryn is the creative, if not cunning and downright manipulating, puppeteer of her own world. She takes charge, ceases any opportunity (whether it be a coincidence or one of her own making) and strives to move up, never down. She does what she needs to do even if that doesn’t necessarily follows everyone’s idea of a “good moral code”. And while she has managed to some how not only understand, but respect the rules of the school, there are also few risks she won’t attempt to take.

She is a wild, she is untamed, beauty with a dash of southern charm. She is always herself and will never be someone else even if it puts her at risk. However, this doesn’t mean she is stupid or naïve to the way things work in the world. Though she may act totally fearless and unconquerable, she knows her limitations and what she probably can get away with and what she absolutely cannot. The witty banter, the cunning insults, the playful if not infuriating rousing seems endless, but may be held back if the situation calls for a more serious approach.

One positive to her odd ways is that when she truly believes in something or desires to help, no one and nothing can hold her back. She finds that even though she tends to want to take charge, she actually isn’t that bad of a team player.



If it hasn’t already become apparent that Bryn is an odd ball, her quirkiness certainly will make up for that. She is goofy and does things just for the lulz, even if it makes herself or someone else look totally ridiculous. However, underneath the strong, protective exterior, Bryn is still like a child. Secretly she just wants to be protected and loved by someone who will always be there for her. The baggage that comes from being orphaned sucks, but she’s been pretty good at coping with it in her opinion so, there aint much to worry about.



The fact is, there is just too many sides to Bryn to list. She is the very meaning of unpredictable; a beautiful chaos that is both sweet and psychotic; graceful but deadly.




Inside the Soul



Abilities:

Gifted with soul perception, Bryn can see the souls of most creatures. These often appear as colorful orbs, each one different from the last. She has the ability to recognize the souls of people she’s met. And while this may be harder with people she’s not as familiar with, is incredibly easy with people she’s really close to. Each soul gives her a unique feel, providing recognition as well as whether or not the soul belongs to a human, a witch, or a kishin egg.



Resonances:N/A

Out of your Mind



Strengths:

-Really fast

-Agile
-Flexible

-Skilled in acrobatics

-Cunning

-Intuitive

- Very good at martial arts
-Stealthy



Weaknesses:

-Not very physically strong
-Doesn’t really know what’s too much for her, as she’s constantly trying to push herself further, so she doesn’t always pick and choose her fights wisely

-Sometimes cocky

-Instigates fights way to much

-Typically not a good loser

-Has a hidden fear that she keeps locked away inside of her



-Has a problem with losing her temper

Hobbies:

-Fighting

-Eating

-Dancing
-Listening to music
-Practicing

-Stalking people

-Being just generally nosey

-Talking to everyone

-She’s pretty much willing to do anything




Likes:

-Food
-Fighting

-Winning
-Proving a point or just being right in general

-Knowing things about people

-Improving

-Doing nothing and just being lazy
-People
-Being barefoot
-Makeouts (heh)

Dislikes:

-Loosing

-Not having people

-Being alone

-Feeling vulnerable

-Being hungry




-Having to always wear shoes and cloths

Aspirations: Go down in history, explore the world, fall in love, be a boss, eat lots of food, and have a hell of a good time.



History:


Bryn grew up on a farm on the outskirts of a small, southern city. Things weren’t too bad, I mean yea they weren’t exactly well to do, but they loved each other and they managed to make enough to get by, often traveling to the nearest town to sell their goods.



At the age of eight, during one of their trips into town, a corrupted soul, on his way to becoming a Kishin, attacked. The town’s people were unprepared and the city was sent into a fearful chaos as the demented creature tore the village apart, devouring soul after soul. In the chaos, the creature managed to tear out both of her parent’s souls, an act that she witnessed. Over come with terror, she managed to escape. However, being the only child and unable to find her way back home, she became an orphan, left to fend for herself.
Some of the town’s people took pity on her and gave her food and sometimes shelter, but for the most part she had to figure out how to survive on her own.



Eventually, she got pretty good at being a hobo. She learned how to manipulate people to get what she wanted, she learned to how to steal from people without them even knowing, how to fight, and even to use her soup perception to know who to rob. By the time she was ten the cute orphan girl who people often took pity on had turned into the town’s nuisance, and she had no problem playing into this role.



Things remained like this until she was twelve, when the town was once again attacked by human corrupted by a Kishin egg. However, unlike the incident that took place four years prior, instead of running, Brynowen attempted to attack the creature. Of course this was stupid and didn’t work at all because she was a stupid kid who didn’t know how to fight something that powerful. Luckily, a Meister and Weapon were there so she didn’t get killed, and seeing the young, reckless orphaned Meister they decided to try to take her back to the school. Determined to become strong enough to take down a Kishin, she went with them and has been at the school ever since.



Extra Notes:

-Probably loves food so much because, growing up on the street, there was often a lack of food.

-Even though she’ll run around in her undies, she’s actually pretty sexually innocent.

-She’s obsessed with music. Her favorite styles are indie rock, folk, rock, and pop but she’ll listen to anything depending on her mood.

-She’s actually a good singer
-She dances, a lot. Like. A lot.

-Pretty much in a constant state of movement

-Bites her lips a lot
-Tends to lean to one side and rest her hand on her hip whenever she’s standing up. Kind of her “default pose”, she actually doesn’t like standing up completely straight for long periods of time.

- Strawberry red is her favorite color

-Her favorite foods are strawberries, desserts, and meat.

-Has a huge apatite and can just eat and eat and eat. Pretty much seems to have a bottomless pit for a stomach
-She sometimes is plagued with nightmares

-Has the habit of running her fingers through her hair was she’s stressed or thinking
-Always wears her hair either down, in pigtails, or a side braid
-She's addicted to coffee
-The most serious promises are either pinky promises or requires the other person to cross their heart and hope to cry. Breaking these promises ensures the harshest of punishments
-Love love loves cats




Behind the strings



Alias: Bryn



Other characters: None



Face Claim: Nope



RP Sample:


She ran, arms pumping, small feet slipping with each stride against the icy, cobblestone streets. With each inhale, the cold air bit into the back of her throat, her ears filled with the screams. She couldn’t escape them, couldn’t rid herself of the wales of terror no matter how hard she pressed her tiny hands against her ears.



“Mommy, daddy!” She cried, a hint of panic etched in her voice. She had only gone around the corner to her favorite candy shop like she always had, but when she came out everyone was scared and she didn’t know why. She couldn’t see anything, could barely push herself through the swarms of terrified bodies that paid little mind to a lost eight year old. All she wanted to do was find her parents and go home; but that was proving impossible.



Rounding the corner, she broke away from the large crowd and ran through a smaller, less populated street. Her eyes darted desperately, hoping to spot the bright redness of her mother’s hair or the comfortingly broad shoulders of her father; but there was nothing. Tears started to prick at the corners of her eyes and she whipped them frantically away with the sleeve of her yellow sweater, scared that they would freeze her eyes shut and she would never be able to find her parents.



Slipping into another street, she froze, her heart leaping for a split second as she caught a glimpse of a familiar lock of red hair up ahead.

“Momma!” She screamed, her bright blue eyes widening with a new found hope as her small legs scrambled into a run.

She reached the secondary street within seconds, heart racing in anticipation. And then suddenly she saw them, arms grasped around each other’s as they ran. She called out again and this time, they heard her call, their heads turning quickly around, their eyes filled with the same panic that she possessed, desperate to find their lost child. Her mom was the first to break into run, her actions quickly followed by her father. But they would never meet.




A shadow dipped across the sky, blocking out the moon momentarily as it shrouded the alley in darkness. She couldn’t help but look up, but instead of a cloud, she found herself staring into the rough, sickly grey body of a monster.

Her mouth dropped open, her eyes filled with horror as the scaly beast landed in the space between her and her parents. She heard a female scream, and then the beast moved, its thick arms coming down like a hatchet over the space that her mother had been and then nothing but red. The scene repeated, only this time the sound came from a man. As her small body froze in sheer terror, unable to move or process what was fully going on. And then, she screamed.



Brynowen gasped, shooting upright in bed, hands clutching the sheets on either side of her. She blinked, looking about the room as if she wasn’t sure exactly where she was. The scene from before had melted away, leaving her in the less-than-terrifying confines of her room that seemed like a tornado had recently blown through it.

Sighing and kicking away some of the cocoon of blankets and stuffed animals she had burrowed herself into away, she stood up, running her fingers through her long, red hair.



It was only a dream.

[Rylux]

Alright, you have a good base for a character but a bit of work needs to be done.

Name: Brynowen is not a name that exist, either explain why her parents gave her such a name or make it so she changed her name to this upon entering Shibusen

Nickname: Why would she be called Strawberry or sparrow, is there a reasoning for this?

Height/Weight: For this site we use this chart www.healthchecksystems.com/heightweightchart.htm to have a basis for healthy height and weights for characters. As it stands she is severely underweight for her height. If you want her to be able to accomplish the feats you described her weight should place her in the medium frame build. Alter this and change her appearance accordingly.

Fighting Style: This needs to be cleared up. As is a lot of this is fluff and doesn’t need to be said as it is obvious. She can’t tackle a sumo wrestler, yes not many people can and it adds nothing to her character. Describe what she specializes in, her usual tactics, what she prefers to use in combat, things like that. Also don’t say what others do, she won’t dodge everything and some people will be able to counter her easily. How did she learn to fight like this as it is not stated in her history?

Personality: –What has she done to prove she has a bite to go with her bark?
-Take out the bit about the charm, if people like her or not is up to them
-They aren’t random acts of kindness if she makes people beg for them
-How does she show she’s in love with herself?
-Again remove the part about other people. Plenty will understand insecurities
-When is it mentioned she is protective?
-please change “for the lulz” to “for fun/for the hell of it” something more proper in tone.
-It doesn’t seem like there are too many sides of her to list, nor that she is psychotic, graceful, or deadly. It seems perfectly clear she is a young teenager who is full of herself, cocky, and does things for fun but actually cares about others and wants to fit in.

Abilities: Soul perception at a one star level would consist of seeing the generic souls of individuals. She would not be able to distinct them as that is an advanced skill which identifies the personality of an individual by their wavelength. She would be able to distinguish kishin eggs from humans but not witches as soul protect stops just that.

Strengths/Weaknesses: Firstly your strengths and weaknesses are nowhere near balanced, she should have 3 of each at the minimum, if more the rates should be equal.
-Agile and fast overlap as a strength, stick to agile
-How is she skilled in acrobatics? Where/How did she learn it? How proficient is she at it?
-How is she skilled in martial arts? Where did she learn it? How proficient is she at it?
-How is she intuitive? It seems more like she is instinctual and just happens to know how to react to the situations she’s been in.
-Not physically strong. This works as a weakness but is contradicted in her appearance with “her surprising amount of strength”
-Nothing else you listed is an acceptable weakness, these need to be balanced with your strengths.

Hobbies: How is stalking a hobby? If she actually stalks people that would probably be a larger part of her character.

History: –Where did she live? What state did she live in?
-Yes the town was unprepared for a kishin egg attack, only demon weapons can kill them so yeah
-How did she escape the kishin egg?
-I’m pretty sure more people in a small town especially would take in an orphaned 8 year old instead of leaving her on the streets.
-Soul perception wouldn’t help her determine who to rob
-It would take more than two years for her to become really proficient at anything
-Why would she bother the town if they helped her?
-It wouldn’t be a “human corrupted by a Kishin egg” it would just be a kishin egg
-Did the kishin egg do anything before attacking the town? Something that would warrant a team from Shibusen actually being there?
-So she went to Shibusen at 12 as an underage orphan and stayed there for 4 years without finding a partner? Where did she live while there?
-Why is she an orphan? Does she need to be an orphan? Could she not go live with a relative like an uncle or grandparents?
-If she witnessed her parents getting their souls devoured that would leave a bit of an impact of her
-How did she discover her soul perception? She wouldn’t have developed it until at least the age of 10 and generally not until puberty

Extra Notes -The thing about food is unnecessary and rather obvious
-Is there a reason for her running around in her undies? That doesn’t seem like something someone who lived on the streets would do
-How is she obsessed with music? I can’t imagine she would hear a lot on the streets
-How is she a good singer and why does she dance? These aen’t traits one would find in someone who lived on the streets
-The hairstyles here contradict what is said in her appearance
-Why is she addicted to coffee? I can’t imagine she had the opportunity to on the streets unless this is a recent addiction.
-Please look over this profile for spelling and grammar mistakes as there are many and it makes it hard to understand what you mean at times.
-Read the rules and character rules, you are missing something from them
-Please copy and paste the template and fill that in as it makes things easier to read and find

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Alrighty i'll try to fix it however I have a couple questions.
The name Brynowen I actually got from a book so I thought it was a real name, I mean the only reason I can think of her parents naming her that is because they wanted to?

With the weight and height thing, I based it off of myself, as it is my current build, height, and weight, and the doctors say I'm completely healthy. Going off of myself, I know that if I weighed between 110-120 pounds I would be chunky if not completely over weight.

As far as the extra notes go, most of them come from her current circumstances. As she does not live on the streets anymore, she would have more access to those things. So I'll add that in there.

Thank you though~

[Rylux]

For the name you can just say her parents named her that, knowing it was an unusual name.

The weight/height ratio is important because she won't be a normal teenager, she will be a student of Shibusen. Most of the weight will consist of muscle she will need to fight. That weight may be fine for a normal person but not someone who is fighting monsters.

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Oh alright, that makes more sense, thanks!